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Blending Quotations ________________________________________________________________ I. The Basics A. Always integrate quotations into your text. B. NEVER just “drop” a quotation in your writing! C. Use your own words to introduce a quotation. II. How To Improve Blending Quotes A. Use only the most effective part of the quotation. For example: Indirect Quotation: Although some viewers might find Forrest “compellingly innocent” and kind, others believe he has character flaws (Ebert). B. Remember to use brackets [ ] if you add or change a word. For example: In Star Wars, “[he] lunges backwards as if suspended in mid air” due to the visual graphics which make it appear that he flies (James). III. Bad Example with Revision A. Bad example: Mr. Radley is an unattractive man. “He was a thin leathery man with colorless eyes, so colorless they did not reflect light” (Lee 32). i. Why? The quote is dropped into the paper as if pretending to stand alone. ii. Do not allow a quote to stand alone! • B. Great example: Harper Lee describes Mr. Radley as “a thin leathery man with colorless eyes…[that] did not reflect light” (32). IV. Using Signal Phrases A. Use signal phrases to blend the quote into the sentence, making it read smoothly Direct Quote: T.S. Eliot, in his “Talent and the Individual,” uses gender-specific language. He argues, for instance, that “no poet, no artist of any art, has his complete meaning alone. [Indeed,] his significance, his appreciation is the appreciation of his relation to the dead poets and artists” (Eliot). ii. Paraphrase: For instance, many consider Yoda the Buddha of the galaxy (Twine). i. More Student Examples • Original: – Night also represents the fire that killed so many people. “And just as the train stopped, this time we saw flames rising from a chimney into a dark sky” (Wiesel 28). • A suggested revision: – Wiesel suggests night represents death by fire as he and other passengers witness “flames rising from a chimney into a dark sky” which are no doubt burning people alive (Wiesel 28). More Student Examples • Original: – You start to see this fairly early in the book. “What had happened to me? My father had been struck in front of me, and I had not even blinked” (Wiesel 39). • A suggested revision: – Elie is disgusted with himself when his father is beaten right “in front of [him], and [he] had not even blinked” (Wiesel 39). He begins to question his own values as his concern for his father appears to decrease. More Student Examples • Original: – Through out the book, most of the killings or horrible events, including Elie, occur during the night. “They must of taken him away before daybreak and taken him to the crematorium” (Wiesel 112). • A suggested revision: – Throughout the book, many horrible events including the killings occur during the night. Indeed, Wiesel tells of a man “taken…away before daybreak… to the crematorium” (Wiesel 112). The Body Paragraphs Proving your thesis… 3rd Person Point of View • When you write any paper that is not a narrative, you MUST write in the 3rd person point of view. • Third person pronouns: he, she, it, him, her, himself, herself, himself, his, her, hers, its, they, them, themselves, their, and theirs • Second person pronouns: You, your, yourself, yours • First person pronouns: I, me, myself, my, mine, we, us, ourselves, our, and ours Present Tense • When referring to events from the movie, you must also write in present tense. • EX: Tony and Maria secretly meet in the shop, much to the dismay of her family. • Dorothy and her house land in colorful Munchkinland, sparking much curiosity from the Munchkins about the new stranger and her dog. Three Body Paragraphs • 1st body paragraph- 1st point that supports your thesis • 2nd body paragraph- 2nd point that supports your thesis • 3rd body paragraph- 3rd point that supports you thesis Topic Sentence • Topic sentence: a topic sentence has a topic and a focus. – Topic: The film’s costumes – Focus: Make it an enjoyable film • Sample: The eye capturing, glitter filled, flirty costumes are one of the many striking aspects that make Some Like it Hot such an enjoyable film. Introducing the quote & Quote with Citation • The revealing, scandalous costumes, mainly worn by Sugar, create pleasure among the audience along with Joe and Jerry; these men need to work hard to resist Sugar’s temptations and keep their true identities disguised because “one of the film’s major themes is disguise and masquerade” (“Some Like it Hot 1959”). – Quotes NEVER stand on their own. Follow the three techniques. Explain Quote • Explain to the reader the importance of the quote and how it supports your topic sentence. • Sample: Over-exaggerated hair, makeup, and costumes in the attempt to make these two men appear as attractive women add to the effect of this comedy. Rinse, repeat. • Introducing the quote & Quote with Citation – In one scene, spectators witness Joe and Jerry as Josephine and Daphne still getting used to all of the “extra parts” needed for their disguise. Jerry, or Daphne at the time, exclaims, “Now you’ve done it! You tore off one of my chests” (Wilder) to Joe, also known as Josephine. Explain Quote • Explain to the reader the importance of the quote and how it supports your topic sentence. • Sample: The absurdity of men dressed as women only amplifies the costumes’ importance and cements this film’s place on the list. Clincher Sentence and transition • Sample: These entertaining costumes add even more amplification to the spirited actors underneath all of the attire, giving the movie life and excitement. The First Body Paragraph • The eye capturing, glitter filled, flirty costumes are one of the many striking aspects that make Some Like it Hot such an enjoyable film. The revealing, scandalous costumes, mainly worn by Sugar, create pleasure among the audience along with Joe and Jerry; these men need to work hard to resist Sugar’s temptations and keep their true identities disguised because “one of the film’s major themes is disguise and masquerade” (“Some Like it Hot 1959”). Over-exaggerated hair, makeup, and costumes in the attempt to make these two men appear as attractive women add to the effect of this comedy. In one scene, spectators witness Joe and Jerry as Josephine and Daphne still getting used to all of the “extra parts” needed for their disguise. Jerry, or Daphne at the time, exclaims, “Now you’ve done it! You tore off one of my chests” (Wilder) to Joe, also known as Josephine. These entertaining costumes add even more amplification to the spirited actors underneath all of the attire, giving the movie life and excitement. 2nd Body paragraphTopic sentence (TS 2) • Sample: Without the compassionate acting contributing to the film, it would just be another lifeless story of men and their struggles. • Transition from previous sentence= amplification from spirited actors— connects both sentences together.