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Exercise 18
No.1
 (Worse) To keep in shape, exercise is a must for
an athlete.
 (Better) An athlete must exercise to keep in
shape.
No.2
 (Worse) When an engineer, customer
satisfaction should be attempted.
 (Better) An engineer should attempt to satisfy
the customer.
No.3
 (Worse) After simulating a real environment, a
consensus was reached.
 (Better) After the researchers simulated a real
environment, a consensus was reached.
No.4
 (Worse) Being radioactive, the technician
handled the materials with extreme care.
 (Better) The technician handled the radioactive
materials with extreme care.
No.5
 (Worse) Several investigations calibrated errors
related to camera distortion, which occurred in
the 1990’s.
 (Better) Several investigations during the
1990’s calibrated errors related to camera
distortion.
No.6
 (Worse) The pedestrian warned the passing car
with an angry look.
 (Better) The pedestrian with an angry look
warned the passing car.
[Note 5.5]
 It is illogical to state that the passing car has an
angry look.
 The revised sentence eliminates the confusion.
No.7
 (Worse) The cellular manufacturing system has
been increasingly applied to industry, which is
an important group technology application.
 (Better) The cellular manufacturing system, an
important group technology application, has
been increasingly applied to industry.
No.8
 (Worse) A genetic algorithm is appropriate for the
machine-component grouping problem which is a
robust adaptive optimization method based on
principles of natural evolution.
 (Better) Genetic algorithm, a robust adaptive
optimization method based on principles of natural
evolution, is appropriate for the machine-component
grouping problem.
[Note 5.6]
 In this sentence, a robust adaptive optimization
method illogically refers to the machinecomponent grouping problem, implying that the
modifying clause has been misplaced.
 The revised sentence places the clause next to
subject that it modifies.
No.9
 (Worse) To encourage adult literacy, public reading
rooms have been established in the city.
 (Better 1) To encourage adult literacy, the government
has established public reading rooms in the city.
 (Better 2) The government has established public
reading rooms in the city to encourage adult literacy.
No.10
 (Worse) When logging onto the Internet,
complicated programming tasks are
unnecessary.
 (Better 1) Complicated programming tasks are
unnecessary when logging onto the Internet.
 (Better 2) Logging onto the Internet does not
require complicated programming tasks.
No.11
 (Worse) As a child, my mother encouraged me
to read many books.
 (Better) My mother encouraged me to read
many books when I was a child.
No.12
 (Worse) Entering the apartment, the light had
been left on.
 (Better) Entering the apartment, I notice that
the light had been left on.