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Lorena Fuentes Response Reply to: WangJun,Zou (John) English B/C September 11th, 2013 Family Issues In his essay (no tile), Zou attempts to explain the importance and the crucial roles that our families play in our lives. Zou particularly focuses on the role our parents play, and the genuine love and care they have for us. However, as social beings, he emphasizes, there are always conflicts that can lead us to create barriers when communicating with our family members. More specifically, he sets up an example of the difficulties he encounters when interacting with his brother as there is always an underlying idea of competition between siblings. Yet, these conflicts will never overshadow the fundamental goals of a real family: love, understanding, and support. Although Zou did a very good job summarizing both articles “Brothers” by Bret Lott, and “There was Rice at Every Meal” by Eric Koji, he could have found more connections between both readings. In addition, those connections would have been more useful to have them in the introduction as it was somehow difficult to understand the purpose of mentioning both readings in the first paragraph without a clear point to make. On the other hand, his paper doesn’t have a thesis statement (the main point of your discussion), so it is difficult to follow the main ideas in his essay. In regards to his conclusion, it was advised in class to add some personal experiences in the conclusion as a way to contextualize the content of the readings. However, Zou mentioned somebody else’s story without citing the source where he took the story from. It is clear that if the story belongs to a famous person, this information is not common knowledge, and hence, must be correctly cited. Finally, even though he tried to make sense of the information in both readings, his paper must be organized so every idea runs smoothly and connects to the main idea of the essay (Thesis Statement). Finally, I was wondering if he used a dictionary to translate the essay from Chinese to English because the essay is full of grammar mistakes which are not reflected on his speaking skills. It is always a good idea to edit your paper twice before submitting a final draft.