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PEAK TO PEAK Writer’s Handbook by Kristie Letter, M.A. Peak to Peak Charter School 800 Merlin Drive Lafayette, Colorado 80026 Revised 6/10 Peak to Peak Writer’s Handbook Writing Stages Checklist Ideas (how to persevere in getting the best argument on paper) 3 Levels of Questions and Information Annotating the Question/Prompt Prewriting Strategies Generating Ideas Content (using integrity to create compelling support) Thesis Statements Persuasive Techniques & Logical Fallacies Textual Evidence Avoiding Plagiarism Revision Organization (making your ideas progress clearly and logically) Paragraphing Organizing the Paper Introductions Conclusions Quick-n-Easy Five-Paragraph Essay Outline Language / Word Choices (selecting exciting and respectful words) Figurative Language Descriptive Techniques Using Fair and Accurate Language Voice (the honest presentation of personality in writing) Tone / Tone Vocabulary SOAPSTone Understanding Audience Sentence Fluency (making your writing flow like a bubbling brook) Transitions Using Conjunctions Sentence Analyzer Conventions (writing truly excellent and correct sentences – grammar!) Parts of Speech Review Complete Sentences Possessives Commonly Confused Words Underlining and Quotation Marks Pronouns and Antecedents Presentation and Appendix How to Format a Paper Readability Graph Ratiocination Linking Verb Song 6 Traits Rubrics Citing Sources Parenthetical Citations Bibliography …3 …4 … 5-6 … 7-9 … 10 … 10 … 11 … 12 … 13 … 13 … 13 … 14 … 15 … 16-18 … 19 … 19 … 20 … 20 … 21 … 22 … 22 … 23 … 24 … 25 … 26-27 … 26 … 28 … 29 … 29 … 30 … 31 … 32 … 33 … 33 … 34 … 35 … 35 … 36 … 36 … 37 … 38-39 … 40 … 41-48 … 49-56 … 57-59 … 60 2 WRITING STAGES CHECKLIST Annotate the question or prompt to be sure that you clearly understand what kind of writing and thinking you need to do. Brainstorm, allowing yourself to freewrite ideas without worrying about your spelling, organization, or paragraphing. Use a graphic organizer to gather and organize your best ideas from the brainstorming. Develop an effective thesis that directly relates to the question/ prompt. Jot notes on the topic sentences (i.e. paragraphs you will develop) that will best support your thesis. Use a line diagram if you wish. Make a note of what kind of voice (i.e. what tone) you want to use in this piece of writing. Write this description at the top of your rough draft pages. Write a rough draft. Take a break from working on your rough draft (preferably at least 24 hours) Reflection: preferably use a peer response and self-reflection to edit your rough draft. Take your own notes and the questions posed by peer to decide how to strengthen your paper. Use the Sentence Analyzer to check your syntax, making sure that you have variety and sophistication in your sentences. Go through to make sure that your language choices reflect the tone you choose, that your descriptions show instead of tell (with precise adjectives) and that active verbs appear in all of your sentences. Take a break from your writing (preferably at least 24 hours.) After incorporating all revisions and reflections, type or write your final draft. Proofread final draft for errors After your teacher gives you feedback on your final draft, reflect on your writing and jot down notes on how you feel about this writing assignment, and goals for your next writing project. These reflections and goals will help shape your future writing. For more information, see Writers Inc. 3 Ideas (gather great thoughts using the pre-writing strategies that lead writers to excellence) I believe that strong imagination imagines the truth, sees a vision of the truth. A good strong imagination doesn’t go off into some wild fantasy of nowhere. It goes to the truth. --Maxine Hong Kingston Annotate (i.e. make notes, underline important words) the prompt or question to be sure that you understand how to consider the task and respond appropriately. Brainstorm and let your ideas flow freely before you begin any kind of formal writing Gather and focus rough ideas generated in brainstorming by using strategies and graphic organizers (Venn diagrams, webs, clustering, listing, timelines.). Collect relevant information, as needed, to help develop your ideas. 4 THE THREE LEVELS OF QUESTIONING and INFORMATION LEVEL ONE: What does the text say? This type of question and information focuses on exactly what the text says. Who are the characters? What is the setting? What color is the horse? Bloom’s Taxonomy key words: observe, recall, list, define, tell, identify, label, collect, name. Level One questions ask for information that can be found right in the text. LEVEL TWO: What does the text mean? This type of question and information goes beyond what the text says to ask why and how. Why do the characters do what they do? How does the setting set the tone for the story? Bloom’s Taxonomy key words: predict, discuss, distinguish, estimate, analyze, explain, infe. Level Two questions are based on the text, but the answers requiring thinking about and analysis of the text. LEVEL THREE: What are the universal implications or themes? This type of question and information touches upon universal themes, inspired by the text but not directly in the text. How does conflict shape someone’s character? Does love at first sight exist? Bloom’s Taxonomy key words: connect, separate, synthesize, relate, create, compare – Level Three prompts will always move beyond the text to broader significance. Learning the Three Levels of questions provides a key tool in asking questions, understanding texts, and in writing papers. Although Level One information provides the basic support, any close reading or argument must move beyond the literal. Instead of “What does the text state?”, the interpretive Level Two asks, “Why and how does the text state this?” Figuring out the level of information ensures that writing will move beyond just retelling (“Here is what happens in chapter two”) into close reading and analysis (“Here are the important connections and themes.”) Level Three analysis moves past the text to broader implications and themes. 5 Take the classic nursery rhyme “Jack and Jill:” Jack and Jill went up the hill To fetch a pail of water Jack fell down and broke his crown And Jill came tumbling after. Level One Questions: (just the facts – you can point to the answer in the text) Who went up the hill? What were they going to fetch there? What is a “crown” (this one needs a dictionary, but is still Level One information)? What happens to Jill? Level Two Questions: (analysis, close reading) What made Jack fall? Why did Jill fall after him? Level Three Questions: (significance, themes, broader implications – move beyond text) Why is fresh water so important to human survival? How do nursery rhymes create gender stereotypes? Level One questions have answers “Right There” – found in the text. Level Two questions ask you to think about something in the text. Level Three questions exist outside of the text, and ask you to think big. 6 ANNOTATING THE QUESTION/PROMPT To get started generating ideas about and responses to a question/prompt, whether the prompt asks writers to compose a certain autobiographical story or to analyze a historical period, begin by focusing on the question. To annotate: make notes, jot down thoughts, underline, rewrite and otherwise mark up the actual question or assignment to be utterly and completely sure that the writer understands what kind of writing and content should be produced. HOW TO ANNOTATE Annotating means focusing on the prompt and making marks documenting your attempts to understand the questions. Writers cannot annotate “in your head” without making notes, underlining etc. Sample question/prompt for writing: Analyze Harriet Tubman’s perseverance in Ann Petry’s biography. Describe her challenges and how she overcomes them. What lessons can we learn from her life? Step one: Define and/or clarify the words in the question. If writers do not know the meaning of the word “perseverance” or need to clarify what “analyze” asks, they need to use a dictionary to determine these definitions. Step two: Underline the key instructions, and number them. Most questions have multiple tasks, and writers don’t want to skip one of the instructions (here the prompt asks a writer to analyze (1) Tubman’s perseverance, describe (2) both her challenges and how she overcame them and conclude (3) with lessons from Tubman’s life. Step three: Rewrite the action steps beneath the question. Abbreviate and reword as appropriate. Step four: Identify the level of the questions in the prompt. If the prompt asks for Level Two analysis, writers cannot rely solely on Level One plot summary! The main reason students lose points on standardized tests (AP’s, TCAP’s, SAT’s) is that they do not respond to all aspects of the question posed. Annotation keeps this oversight from happening! 7 Sample Annotation of a writing prompt: Analyze Harriet Tubman’s perseverance in Ann Petry’s biography. Describe her challenges and how she overcomes them. What lessons can we learn from her life? Important Words in Questions, Assignments and Writing Prompts: (with suggestions for prewriting forms to begin generating ideas) Analyze or Evaluate: Go beyond Level One information (definitions) to discuss meaning. Evaluate the merit, weigh evidence and discuss implications of this meaning. Use persuasive techniques and textual evidence. Line diagrams and Cause/Effect organizers provide excellent prewriting strategies. Compare and/or Contrast: Look for qualities or characteristics that two things share and/or ways that they differ. Emphasize areas of overlap, but without oversimplifying. Explain why these two things have this relationship. Venn Diagrams are a great prewriting strategy for comparison. Criticize: Judge the merit or truth of the views or factors. Give the results of your analysis of these factors. Address both sides of the issue to avoid oversimplification. A Pro/Con is a perfect prewriting strategy. Define: Give concise, clear and authoritative (i.e. based in solid evidence or documentation) meanings. Don’t give details, but do mention the difference between the things you are defining and other commonly confused items, periods or problems. Webs and Definition Diagrams offer wonderful prewriting strategies. Describe, List or Enumerate: Recount, characterize, sketch, or relate in a sequence, outline or story form. Pay attention to the proper order of events or information. The 5-W’s chart helps harmonize description in prewriting. Process diagrams help writers collect details for enumerating Diagram or illustrate: Use drawing, charts, plans or another kind of graphic answer. Be sure to label the diagram, clearing explaining both the information presented and the implications. 8 Interpret or discuss: Translate, give examples of, say what this subject means. Usually the interpretive question wants a writer to give a judgment and do evaluation as well. Webs work well as a prewriting strategy for interpretations Justify or Prove: Give reasons for decisions or conclusions, taking pains to be convincing using the proper persuasive techniques. Use clear compelling evidence. Outline: Organize a description under main points and subordinate points, omitting minor details and stressing the arrangement of things. A line diagram provides lovely organization for an outline. Summarize: Give the main points or most important aspects in condensed form, like the summary of a chapter, omitting details and specific examples. Trace: In narrative form describe the progress, development or events starting at their beginning and progressing in a chronological fashion. A timeline provides a terrific prewriting strategy for tracing. Level One Question Words: define, describe, identify, label, list, match, name, outline, state Level Two Question Words: apply, analyze, categorize, combine, compare, contrast, demonstrate, diagram, explain, justify, illustrate, interpret, modify, organize, relate, select, solve Level Three Questions: Rather than certain words, this type of question asks for readers to move beyond the text and show universal themes, implications or messages. For more information, see Writers Inc. 9 PREWRITING STRATEGIES: GATHERING INFORMATION Not even the most adept writers can sit down and begin to write a final copy without prewriting. In order to have compelling and well-developed final products, writers must first use prewriting strategies to collect, prioritize and organize information. This information works much like the recipe for baking a cake: writers need to have the ingredients and combine them in the proper order. Step One: Annotate the question (What’s being asked?) Step Two: Brainstorm (What is the appropriate response?) Step Three: Use a graphic organizer (Writers Inc. describes many graphic organizers and how to use them) to gather and order the information generated in the brainstorming process. (What order best conveys information?) Step Four: Use other sources if appropriate (texts, interviews, research) to gather more information. (What supports this information?) Step Five: Develop the Thesis (What is the main argument?) For more information, see Writers Inc. GENERATING IDEAS After annotating and understanding what the question or prompt asks, writers need to tap into their amazing and unique ideas. Start by freewriting or brainstorming. The Rules for Brainstorming: Don’t Use Any Rules When Brainstorming Writers must stop themselves from following all of the usual grammar and organization rules in writing. Just let it out! Do not lift pencils up from the paper and don’t worry about repetition, word choice, spelling or “dumb ideas.” The writing process has many steps and never happens in just one sitting. In the inspiring words of British writer Samuel Johnson: “What is written without effort is in general read without pleasure.” For more information, see Writers Inc. 10 Content (backing up great ideas with solid information) It is wiser to find out than to suppose. --Mark Twain Use Level Two and Level Three analysis. Provide persuasive support for a Level Two thesis in your body paragraphs. Avoid imprecision and overstatement. Use persuasive techniques. Find textual evidence (Level One) to support your thesis. Document your sources and support to avoid plagiarism (See pages 36-39 for help with citing sources.) 11 THESIS STATEMENTS At the end of the first paragraph of an essay, writers need a thesis statement to present the argument, topic and scope of the paper. A thesis statement can never just be Level One information (a factual statement), but must move to a Level Two analysis (going deeper into questions and importance.) The formula (according to Writers Inc.): a specific subject + a specific condition, feeling or stance _____________________________ = an effective thesis statement This formula requires that writers focus what they want to say. A weak thesis that needs to be improved can benefit from this recipe. For example: Bullying is bad. What kind of bullying? Bad in what way? What does the writer propose to do about bullying? This thesis presents a general topic but no specific details on what the paper will argue. With the thesis recipe, this topic can be expanded. a specific subject bullying in secondary schools + a specific condition, feeling or stance bystanders can eliminate bullying _____________________________ = an effective thesis statement The commitment of bystanders can eliminate verbal bullying in secondary schools by taking power away from bullies. Truly effective thesis statements combine two elements: a well-articulated subject and a wellarticulated stance. A thesis statement essentially becomes the topic sentence for an entire paper, and needs to contain the scope of what the paper will cover. The thesis needs to focus on the specific argument because an essay can never cover all the aspects of a vague Level Three topic (“Survival demands perseverance”). Instead, a focused thesis will provide the actual parameters in the writing (“In Island of the Blue Dolphins, Karana’s perseverance ensures her survival.”) The difference between a thesis statement and a topic sentence: A thesis statement presents the argument and scope of the entire paper. A topic sentence presents the focus of a paragraph. For more information, see Writers Inc. 12 PERSUASIVE TECHNIQUES The best way to support an opinion or to be persuasive requires the use of not just logic but also evidence. Textual evidence provides essential support for academic writing. If writers want to persuade a reader that Henry VII ruled badly, they must refer to specific examples. To be persuasive, writers must back up Level Two and Level Three assertions (opinions and interpretations) with Level One evidence (i.e. facts found in your textbook, the novel, the internet, etc.), and writers must also shape arguments carefully with persuasive techniques. Always cite sources (tell the reader where the writer found the information) for direct quotes and information not only to be persuasive, but to avoid plagiarism, a serious ethical infraction where a writer claims someone else’s words as his or her own. See pages 36-39 for help with citing sources. Top Five Persuasive Techniques: Use specific evidence as support Know the intended audience, and address appropriately Make predictions based on the evidence Make concessions as necessary Anticipate the opposition For more information, see Writers Inc. Anticipating the Opposition One of the most effective persuasive techniques is to think like the opponent. What would someone with the opposing point of view say? How can you address these opposing points in your argument? “I know you worry for my safety, but I promise to wear a helmet.” LOGICAL FALLACIES Logical fallacies occur when the logic of an argument lacks support or goes too far with its points. Avoid these murky logic pitfalls: Circular Thinking She enjoys her work because her work gives her enjoyment. (the statement says the same thing twice rather than providing any evidence) Either/Or thinking If we do not elect my uncle, the county will completely fall apart! (other options exist) Testimonial Michael Jordan really loves this energy drink. (does not mean anyone else will) Oversimplification We just need to eat an apple a day and no one will ever get a cold again. (goes too far) To prove a point and convince a reader, a writer needs fact-based evidence and logical arguments. Sometimes even wonderful arguments (“vegetables improve health”) will not convince if the writer overstates the point (“Eating vegetables will cure everything.”) Watch out for words such as “all,” “every,” “never,” “always,” “best,” and “worst;” These words make arguments nearly impossible to prove and weaken the writer’s credibility. 13 REVISION Just as important as great planning and careful writing, revision requires a writer to return to a piece of writing and make it more effective. Revision Tips: Set the paper aside for a day or two if possible, in order to return with a fresh perspective. Have someone else (a peer or a parent) read the essay and articulate what questions he or she has that the paper does not answer. Check each topic sentence against the thesis, to be sure that every topic sentence directly addresses the argument presented in the thesis. Check that each body paragraph stays focused. Read the paper out loud to hear how the words sound and to discover written errors. Put the writing through the Sentence Analyzer to improve sentence fluency. Analyze the paper using the Six Traits of Writing Rubric, to see which aspects need improvement. Sample Response Questions (for a peer or parent): These questions do not ask someone else to rewrite or “fix” a piece of writing; instead they ask an unbiased reader to articulate what he or she understands or doesn’t understand (i.e. What does the paper effectively conveys?) The writer must decide how to use this information for revision. What questions do you have that the paper didn’t answer? List at least two. What is the purpose of this paper? How does the writer grab your attention in the beginning? How could the writer grab even more of your attention? Does this paper ever seem to stray from the original topic? What is your favorite word or phrase in this paper. Why? Is there a word that the writer repeats too many times? What is it? Do any words seem to be misspelled? Circle them. Do any parts that sound confusing? Put a wavy line beneath any confusing words, phrases or sentences. How does the conclusion suggest the broader relevance of this argument (in other words, why this argument is important)? For more information, see Writers Inc. 14 Organization (maximizing clarity of writing by putting thoughts in logical order) As many arrows, loosed several ways, come to one mark…so may a thousand actions, once afoot, end in one purpose. --William Shakespeare Start with a clear beginning that intrigues readers and draws them into the piece of writing. Compose a clear, specific thesis (usually the last sentence in the first paragraph) that states the subject and takes a stand. Order ideas so that they flow logically from one to another. Use transitions help the reader understand and see the relationship between separate elements in the writing. Focus paragraphs with topic sentences that support the thesis and present the scope of the particular paragraph. Include a clear conclusion that sums up the argument, and suggests the further relevance of the topic. 15 PARAGRAPHING The paragraph creates a unit of organization for writing, keeping ideas together and in a logical order. These clusters of information unify around one main point, expressed in the topic sentence, and all sentences in the paragraph should relate to this point. Reasons for beginning a new paragraph: 1. A shift to a new idea 2. Change in speakers (in a dialogue) 3. An important change in time or setting A well-fleshed paragraph usually needs a minimum of five sentences to address a topic adequately, although longer paragraphs (especially ones that incorporate textual evidence) offer more depth. The exception to this general five-sentence rule is always dialogue (which requires a new paragraph for each new speaker even if the “paragraphs” are only a few words long.) Parts of a Paragraph Topic Sentence (the label on the box describing its contents): Presents the topic or argument that all the information in the paragraph will address. In essays, the topic sentences relate back to the thesis (which is the topic sentence for an entire paper rather than just a paragraph.) Body Sentences (the things inside the box): Provide the details and specifics in support of the topic sentence. These sentences can analyze, interpret and explain. Textual evidence belongs in the body sentences of paragraphs, as further proof in support of the topic. Body sentences must match the “label” of the topic sentence. Conclusion Sentence (the tape holding the box together): Brings the paragraph to a close with final information to keep readers engaged with the paragraph’s subject and to link it with the topic of the next paragraph. This sentence may also suggest the importance or implication of the information presented in the paragraph. Paragraphs often begin with grabbers, sentences that grab readers’ attention, or transitions, sentences that build bridges with other ideas in a paper. These sentences often use interjections, quotes, fascinating detail or intriguing questions to capture interest. For more information, see Writers Inc. 16 Figure A provides a visual example of paragraph structure. Figure A: paragraph organization A optional grabber or transition 1 topic sentence – the label on the box explaining exactly what will be found inside 2 specific detail/example 1 3 specific detail/example 2 4 specific detail/example 3 5 conclusion - bringing ideas together, summing up and making transition to next paragraph How can this paragraph structure work to organize ideas? Look at the paragraph in Figure B. below (which ironically happens to be about paragraphs) and observe how the separate sentences fit into the categories described in Figure A. Figure B: paragraph organization A How does a paragraph grow? 1 Writing a well-structured paragraph requires the logical organization of ideas. 2 Initially, the readers need to know the focus of what they will read. 3 Then readers need specific details to support those ideas presented in the topic sentence. 17 4 Finally, the conclusion ties together the ideas and suggests their importance. 5 Ultimately writers can convey their thoughts effectively and change the world by allowing well-organized ideas to grow into wellstructured paragraphs! Use Figure C to help structure paragraphs Figure C: paragraph organization A grabber 1 topic sentence 2 specific detail/example 1 3 specific detail/example 2 4 specific detail/example 3 5 conclusion Practice writing paragraphs with more than five sentences, but make sure that all the sentences stay on topic. Remember to incorporate textual evidence in the body sentences of paragraphs. Always end paragraphs with your own thoughts and analysis. 18 ORGANIZING A PAPER OR ESSAY Basic structure: 1. Introductory Paragraph (grabber, introduction of topic, and specific thesis) 2. Body Paragraphs (topic sentences relating to thesis, details/ explanations and conclusions) 3. Conclusion Paragraph (specific conclusion, emphasis, and broader implications) Introductory Paragraph: This paragraph introduces readers to the essay, sets up expectations and grabs readers’ attention. Grabbers (or interesting ways to begin an essay that will engage readers in the topic) Grabbers are often Level Three information. Provocative questions (“Can one person’s good deeds change the world?”) Don’t overuse this one! An interesting story about the subject (“A teenager recently started an organization to collect used books for children in her town.”) Present a significant fact or statistic (“Each week, over a million teenagers volunteer their time to help improve the world.”) Use a quotation from an expert or on the subject matter (“William Shakespeare states in The Merchant of Venice, ‘How far that little candle throws his beams! So shines a good deed in a naughty world.’”) Define an important term (“Volunteering means contributing time and energy to a cause without getting paid for these efforts.”) Avoid dictionary definitions. After grabbing readers’ attention, the introductory paragraph should lead into the thesis statement with an explanation of the text, historical period or issue that the paper will present. These explanations set readers up for the specific argument at the end of the introductory paragraph: the thesis statement. Introductory paragraphs move from general to specific. ---Grabber, generally fascinating point or question (often Level Three) ---introductory explanations/facts (Level One) ---Specific thesis presenting the focus and argument of the paper (Level Two) 19 Body paragraphs: These paragraphs follow the typical paragraph structure, with the topic sentences all articulating and proving one aspect of the thesis. The number of body paragraphs in a paper or essay will vary based on the assignment length and how many you need to prove your points. Conclusion: The first sentence of a conclusion refers back to your thesis with a specific recap of your argument. The next sentences examine the further implications of your topic or argument. Conclusion paragraphs move from specific to general: ---Specific conclusion of thesis (Level Two) --- Final thoughts on subject ---Broader implications, final food for thought (Level Three) Quick-n-Easy Outline for Five Paragraph Essay: Paragraph One (Intro): Grabber Introduction of Subject Specific Thesis Paragraph Two-Four (Body): Topic Sentence #1 Detail Detail Detail Conclusion Sentence Paragraph Five (Conclusion): Specific Conclusion Parting Thoughts and Broader Implications 20 Language/Word Choices (DICTION --finding the perfect, precise words and expressions to convey thoughts) Words! Mere words! How terrible they were! How clear, and vivid and cruel! One could not escape from them. And yet what a subtle magic there was in them. They seemed to be able to give a plastic form to formless things, and to have a music of their own as sweet as that of viol or lute. Mere words! Was there anything so real as words? --Oscar Wilde Employ literary techniques such as figurative language, allusion, and rhetorical questions to make language more descriptive and interesting. Avoid clichés, trite expressions and vague words. Describe topics as precisely as possible. Vary your words rather than relying on the same ones throughout a piece of writing. Show your readers exactly what something looks like, smells like or means rather than just telling them that something is “pretty,” “sweet” or “important.” Paint a picture with words. 21 FIGURATIVE LANGUAGE Figurative language moves beyond literal meanings to make interesting new connections. By using and understanding figurative language, writers can broaden descriptive possibility. Types of figurative language Hyperbole: exaggeration used for emphasis I have read that book a million times! Metaphor: comparing two unlike things without using “like” or “as” She is a flame, brightly illuminating any room. Personification: giving human qualities to an inanimate object The sun smiled down on all the delighted children. Simile: comparing two unlike things using “like” or “as” Andrew runs like a cheetah, swiftly and accurately. OTHER DESCRIPTIVE TECHNIQUES Alliteration: beginning several words with the same sound. Quickly, the student quieted the koala. Allusion: making a reference to a mythological, literary or historical person, place or thing. He became the class Shakespeare, penning great comedies for all to enjoy. Foreshadowing: using hints or clues in a narrative to suggest future action. Flashback: a scene that interrupts the flow of events to retell a previous event. Onomatopoeia: using words that mimic the sounds they describe. “Aieee!” the dog howled when the buzzing bee stung his paw. Oxymoron: a form of paradox that combines two words with opposite meanings into one expression. A loud silence descended on the room after Julie ate the last jumbo shrimp. Paradox: a seemingly contradictory remark that is actually meaningful. “Water, water everywhere and not a drop to drink.” Samuel Taylor Coleridge (this paradox works because the sailors cannot drink the surrounding seawater.) Repetition: deliberately using any language element more than once - words, phrases, sentences,or grammatical patterns. Rhetorical Question: a question posed that the writer actually does not want answered. How much longer should we stand by and do nothing? For more information, see Writers Inc. 22 USING FAIR and ACCURATE LANGUAGE In order to express clear intent and not disrespect anyone, writers must use fair language. GENDER: Express equality Words such as “mankind” imply that the writer only refers to men; use “people” to be inclusive of both genders. In writing about occupation, certain gendered terms imply that only a male (or female) person could hold that job. By using gender-neutral terms, writers express equality and accuracy. Other gender issues in writing include assumptions on the basis of gender (that dentists must be men), or derogatory terms (chick, babe, stud) that do not have a place in academic writing. Instead of a potentially unfair term….. policeman lady doctor mailman stewardess chairman mankind Use the preferred term….. police officer doctor mail carrier, postal worker flight attendant chair, presiding officer humankind, humans, people ETHNICITY AND SEXUALITY: Show acceptance and inclusiveness Always avoid using “gay” as a negative adjective: this usage not only expresses disrespect but also violates BVSD’s policies. Always avoid ethnic slurs (even in “jokes”), which also violate BVSD’s policies. When appropriate use the most precise ethnic category (i.e. Sioux, Inuit, Chinese, Tibetan, Nigerian.) Instead of a potentially unfair term….. colored, Afro-American Oriental Use the preferred term….. black, African-American Asian American, Asian DISABLILITY AND IMPAIRMENT: Put people first People with various conditions should not be described as if their conditions define them: (the retarded, epileptics.) Instead, describe them as people who happen to have a condition. Always avoid using “retarded” as a negative adjective: this usage not only expresses disrespect but also violates BVSD’s policies. Instead of a potentially unfair term….. the retarded quadriplegics handicapped deaf blind Use the preferred term….. people with mental retardation people who are quadriplegic disabled hearing impaired visually impaired For more information, see Writers Inc. 23 Voice (how a work presents a consistent TONE appropriate for its purposes) Give me the right word and the right accent and I will move the world. Joseph Conrad Know your audience and write using language and tone appropriate for this audience; using the SOAPSTone analyzer in this section helps clarify this information. Write an adjective to describe the tone and voice you want on the top of your rough draft; look at this adjective while writing to create a voice consistent with your intent. Give your writing personality—let some of yourself shine! Make sure your tone fits your purpose and will effectively address the subject matter. Read your work out loud and see how the language sounds; make the words sound natural. Check that your tone remains consistent throughout a work of writing, rather than switching mid-paper. 24 TONE Tone is the speaker or author’s attitude toward the subject. To miss the tone is often to miss the meaning of a work. A dog owner who scratches her pet’s ears and affectionately says, “You are the ugliest beast on the planet” does not actually intend insult to her dear dog. Tone Vocabulary: This list of fabulous adjectives that can help writers describe the tone of a work being analyzed, or a tone the writer would like to effect in his or her own writing. If you want to do well on the SAT’s – be sure to define all the tone words below. afraid angry bitter boring dreamy happy hollow joyful proud sharp silly sweet tired upset vexed cold dramatic confused sad childish urgent joking poignant mocking restrained polite detached loving formal aloof somber objective complimentary provocative sympathetic giddy peaceful sentimental comforting conniving audacious forlorn condescending frivolous mournful sarcastic contemptuous malicious horrific pitiful nostalgic zealous irreverent idactic apologetic questioning benevolent candid humorous seductive Analyzing the tone of a piece of text and establishing a tone in writing establishes meaning. Look at the sentences below. In both, the speakers utter the exact same words. The textual clues about the tone however, show that these “hat” statements have nearly opposite meanings. “I love that hat,” she said thinking of the last time her mother wore it. The tone of her comment is serious and thoughtful, as she waxes nostalgic about the last time her mother wore this particular hat. “I love that hat,” the bully said with a sneer. The tone of this comment - same exact words - determines its meaning. This bully does not reminisce or give a compliment; instead the bully speaks sarcastically with malicious intent. Exercise: Just to test out tone, try saying the exact same sentence (“I like your hat” will work) with different tones from the tone vocabulary. How does the tone change what this sentence means and how it sounds? If you find yourself unsure about a certain word’s meaning then use your resources and look it up! 25 SOAPSTone In order to write effectively about a text (anything from a political cartoon to a fairy tale), writers must have a strategy for understanding and discussing the text. SOAPSTone provides a great place to start. In order to achieve a consistent and engaging voice, writers need to articulate their own SOAPSTone information. Speaker Occasion Audience Purpose Subject Tone Who is the Speaker (perspective)? The speaker is the voice that tells the story. The speaker is not the same as the author! Robert Browning wrote several “Madhouse Cell” poems with crazy, often murderous narrators, while remaining perfectly sane himself. You might decide to write a story from your cat’s perspective. What is the Occasion (context)? The occasion is the environment that produced a piece of writing, the time and the place. Was this piece commissioned by an editor? Did the Civil War rage while the author wrote? What context produced this piece of writing? Who is the Audience (group of readers/listeners)? The audience is the group of readers to whom the speaker (again – not the writer) directs the piece. How would writing be different if directed to a friend versus directed to a senator? What particular group of people is this piece attempting to convince or entertain? What is the Purpose (intended message)? The purpose is the reason behind the text. What does the speaker want the audience to think or do as a result of reading the text? What is the intended message? What is the theme? What is the Subject (topic and content)? The subject is the topic and content of a piece of writing. Is this text about eating green eggs and ham, or about a small engine chugging up a hill? What is the Tone (attitude)? The tone is the attitude of the author, the way the writer uses voice. Does the speaker use sarcasm or deep sorrow to convey these thoughts? 26 As a reading strategy, SOAPSTone helps writers understand the separate elements of a piece of writing. Anu’s Birthday Party Anu wants all of her nearest and dearest friends to help celebrate her birthday this Saturday! Instead of a present, please bring a can of food to donate to the local food bank. Dress in your best Hawaiian shirt and be prepared to dance the hula and the limbo! We can’t wait to see you on Saturday! Time: 3-6 Place: Anu’s house Consider the birthday invitation above. Performing a SOAPStone analysis will help in understanding what this mysterious document means. Speaker: Anu and her parents Occasion: Anu’s birthday Audience: Anu’s close friends Purpose: To inform Anu’s friends about her birthday, what to wear and what to bring. Subject: The party on Saturday Tone: Exuberant and Affectionate As a writing strategy, SOAPSTone will help writers determine the effect of their own writing, as well as helping readers determine meaning in the writing. Consider how differently these two writings “about birds” by the same author will turn out based on the SOAPSTone analysis. Writing #1 “about birds” Speaker: A concerned thirteen year-old citizen Occasion: Upcoming vote on protected wetlands Audience: State senator Purpose: To convince senator to vote to protect the habitat of local wetland birds. Subject: How much local wetland birds need a protected area for their survival. Tone: Formal, Urgent and Persuasive Writing #2 “about birds” Speaker: A fictional young inventor Occasion: Anniversary of the Wright brothers’ flight Audience: A fictional group of 19th century folks who would be awed by airplanes Purpose: To encourage townsfolk to purchase new “birdsuits” Subject: The astonishing invention of a feather-covered cape that helps humans fly Tone: Humorous, Light-hearted and Sarcastic 27 Sentence Fluency (otherwise known as SYNTAX, or how the sentences flow) Time and time again, I am filled up with all that I thought life might be—glorious moment upon glorious moment of contentment and joy and love running into each other and forming an extraordinary chain: a hymn sung in rounds. Jamaica Kincaid Vary the length of sentences. Use transition words both to lead readers from one thought to another and to avoid repetitive sentence beginnings. Replace linking verbs and passive voice in writing with strong action verbs. Combine short, choppy sentences into longer, more elegant ones. Read your work out loud to see how it sounds, and to ensure that its rhythms sound appropriate. Have a peer or parent read your work out loud to you in order to listen more objectively to the sound of your writing. For more information, see “sentence” in the index of Writers Inc. 28 TRANSITION WORDS To make writing more effective and to help sentences flow smoothly, use transition words. These words signal connections, and help readers link ideas. Using transition words will necessarily add variety to sentence beginnings and improve sentence fluency. To show additional thoughts also, another, besides, further, furthermore, in addition, moreover, next To give examples especially, for example, for instance, in fact, in other words, specifically To compare also, correspondingly, equally, similarly, likewise To contrast although, but, however, even though, in contrast, on the other hand, otherwise, still, whereas, yet To show time after, as, before, next, once, during, later, finally, initially, meanwhile, then, when, while, immediately To show place or direction above, below, beyond, nearby, (most prepositions provide great transitions) To indicate cause and effect accordingly, as a result, consequently, for this reason, hence, if, since, so, therefore, thus To summarize or conclude all in all, as a result, consequently, therefore, finally, now, overall, ultimately CONJUNCTIONS FOR TRANSITIONS FANBOYS: useful coordinating conjunctions to make compound sentences with internal transitions For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So Spectacular Subordinating Conjunctions: useful joining words that make complex sentences with internal transitions although, because, when, while, wherever, since, unless, whenever YUCKY TRANSITION WORDS TO AVOID: These particular transition words do not offer specific or interesting connections. First, second, third (etc.!), in conclusion (this one is just too obvious), to sum up For more information, see Writers Inc. 29 SENTENCE ANALYZER Put paragraphs through the sentence analyzer below when your ideas, content, and organization seem strong. This form helps writers evaluate the smoothness and flow of writing. Adjust sentences until the questions at the bottom of each column can be answered “Yes.” Sentence Number Number of Words Sentence Beginnings Count the number of words in each sentence. List the first four words of each sentence. Are the sentences of various lengths (with at least one longer than 10 words?) Do the opening words contain variety and appropriate transition words? Special Features Verbs Note any literary techniques used (types of figurative language, repetition, allusion, alliteration, etc.) List the verbs in each sentence (some may have more than one.) Does the paragraph employ at least one literary technique? Do the sentences contain strong active verbs (avoiding passive tense and “to be”)? 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. 6. 7. 8. 9. 10. 11. 12. 13. 14. Evaluate your sentences and make changes until each question can be answered “Yes.” Yes No Yes No Yes No Yes No 30 Conventions (otherwise known as Grammar!) Then, rising with Aurora’s light, The Muse invoked, sit down to write; Blot out, correct, insert, refine, Enlarge, diminish, interline. ---Jonathan Swift Check your grammar Check your grammar Check your grammar Check your grammar Check your grammar Check your grammar 31 PARTS OF SPEECH REVIEW “They’ve a temper, some of them—particularly verbs: they’re the proudest--adjectives you can do anything with, but not verbs— however I can manage the whole lot of them!” Humpty Dumpty in Lewis Carroll’s Through the Looking Glass Understanding the parts of speech helps writers compose grammatically correct sentences and figure out the best way to convey information. Nouns: name a person, place, thing or idea Mr. Fontana, school, books, integrity Pronouns: replace a noun he, she, they, him, her, them, it, who, that, there, anyone, nobody Verbs: express action or a state of being run, jumps, persevered, becomes, was, had been, will be, is Adverbs: modify or describe verbs, adjectives or other adverbs answering the adverbial questions How? When? Where? Why? To what degree? quickly, very, well, not, never, always, thoughtfully Adjectives: describe nouns and pronouns honest, brown, whimsical, hard-working, the Conjunctions: connect words, phrases and clauses The FANBOYS (coordinating conjunctions): For, And, Nor, But, Or, Yet, So subordinating conjunctions: although, as, because, before, since, though, unless, when Prepositions: show relationships between their objects (nouns or pronouns) and the rest of the sentence. across, at, behind, by, except, from, in, of, on, out, to, under, up, with Interjections: express emotion or surprise (the life of the party!) Oh no! Wow! Fiddlesticks! Yee-Haw! Whoops! Ouch! Yes? For more information, see Writers Inc. 32 COMPLETE SENTENCES The backbone of effective writing relies upon constructing effective sentences. In order to convey information to a reader, writers must compose sentences by following all five fantastic rules below every time they write a sentence: Capitalize the first letter. End with proper punctuation. Stay on one topic. Have a clear subject (a noun, pronoun, or a group of words acting as a noun) Have a verb. Without these fabulous five sentence-making techniques, writers will not have a complete sentence. POSSESSIVES When writers add an “S” to nouns to show ownership (which turns the nouns into adjectives), they must use an apostrophe. “The landscape belonging to Lafayette” becomes “Lafayette’s landscape.” The rule for possessives: add an apostrophe and then an “S” except when the word ends in “S” making it plural. Some words (Chris, glass, crisis) end in “S” but are not plural, and they follow the standard possessive rule: an apostrophe and then an “S” (Chris’s, glass’s, crisis’s). Possessives using apostrophe, then “s” Singular Noun dog’s bone, Joaquin’s answer, town’s beauty Singular Noun that ends in “S” Chris’s integrity, dress’s button, kindness’s rewards Plural Noun that does not end in “S” people’s opinions, children’s toys, oxen’s yoke The ONLY time Possessives just need an apostrophe and not an added “S” Plural Noun that ends in an “S” dresses’ buttons, dogs’ bones, students’ answers Consistent use of correct possessives helps readers understand what certain writing means: the student’s answer = the answer of one student the students’ answer = the answer of more than one student COMMONLY CONFUSED WORDS MASTER LIST For more information, see Writers Inc. 33 COMMONLY CONFUSED WORDS MASTER LIST Master these essential commonly confused words in order to improve clarity and conventions. Use the Writers Inc. “Commonly confused words” list for more of the most perplexing combinations, but these below represent the must-be-memorized-now—immediately! Accept: a verb that means “to receive” or “to believe” Because I accept your opinion about my hard work, I will gladly accept this award for perseverance. Except: preposition meaning “everything but” I love all fruits except the bizarrely fuzzy peach. It’s: contraction for “it is” It’s easier to catch flies with honey than with vinegar. Its: pronoun showing possession The mangy dog scratched its plethora of fleas. Than: used to compare two things Peak to Peak students learn more quickly than lightning. They enjoy reading more than television. Then: indicates time I complete my homework and then play with my little brother. Their: pronoun showing possession The basketball players practiced their free throws. There: adverb used to show location On the bookshelf over there, twenty-seven captivating novels await. (Avoid using “there” vaguely, as in “There are three kids playing.” Instead write “Three kids play.”) They’re: contraction for “they are” Please do not disturb the penguins when they’re dancing. To: preposition indicating direction (or used to make a verb infinitive) In order to shine academically, she went to school each day with a positive attitude. Too: means “also” or “very” She too believed that the walrus weighed too much to be carried downstairs. Two: number directly following one I will have two ice cream cones please. Your: pronoun showing possession Your smile glows like a friendly lantern illuminating your face. You’re: contraction for “you are” You’re a fabulous writer. For more information, see Writers Inc. 34 UNDERLINING AND QUOTATION MARKS Any reference to a book, movie, TV show or poem needs to be properly punctuated to identify it as a title. Usually, anything full length will be italicized or underlined (though not both simultaneously!) Segments or sections of a longer work (one song from a CD for example) will need quotation marks. Italicize or Underline “Use Quotation Marks” books short stories movies poems journals chapters long musical works songs magazines articles newspapers one-act plays paintings and sculpture episode titles plays TV and radio programs CD titles For more information, see Writers Inc. PRONOUNS An antecedent is the noun that a pronoun replaces. In the sentence “Bob paused and then he jumped” Bob = antecedent; he = pronoun replacing “Bob” Pronouns must match their antecedents; singular antecedents require singular pronouns. The flock of geese flew north and then it turned northwest. Flock = singular antecedent it = singular pronoun replacing “flock” Antecedents that always take a singular pronoun anybody, anyone, anything, each, everybody, everyone, everything, either, neither, nobody, nothing, one, another, somebody, someone, something, whatever, whichever, whoever Someone lost his or her keys (not “their keys”!) Anybody can succeed if he or she works diligently. Everybody needs to pursue his or her dream. Antecedents that always take a plural pronoun both, few, others, several Both Amelia Earhart and Rosa Parks challenged conventional viewpoints with their bravery. Few remember every detail when they dream. Avoid vague pronouns--- those pronouns without antecedents. These pronouns force readers to guess what they mean, and they lack precision. Getting rid of vague pronouns VAGUE: It is a gorgeous sunny day. (Vague pronoun, dull verb) SPECIFIC: Today the sun shines gorgeously. (Much more precise and active) For more information, see Writers Inc. 35 PRESENTATION A paper needs not only strong writing and exciting ideas, but also a clear presentation (or format) in order to be effective. Rough drafts and especially brainstorming need not follow any of the formatting rules except the following: Write legibly Label each draft so that you know which stage of writing it represents Guidelines for presentation of final drafts: Always put name, date, period and teacher (in that order!) in the upper right-hand corner. Center the title above the text of the paper if not using a cover page. Do not put the title in quotes (only for referring to the paper in another work) and never underline the title of a paper. Use 1-inch margins Double space if typing. Indent paragraphs ½ inch. Do not add an extra space between paragraphs. Indent long direct quotations 1 inch from the left margin. Type in standard 12-inch font such as Times, Palatino, Helvetica (no fancy fonts or extralarge sizes) or write in neat cursive. Write or type only on one side of the paper. Number each page in the bottom right-hand corner. Staple all the pages together (no paper clips or tape) in the upper, left-hand corner. Arrange the paper in the following order: 1. 2. 3. 4. Cover page (if applicable) Body or text of the paper Works Cited or Bibliography (if applicable) Appendices (if appropriate - charts, graphs, illustrations, rough draft or peer response forms) 36 GRAPH FOR ESTIMATING READABILITY Directions: 1. Count the first 100 words in your essay and place mark. Note: If your piece begins with dialogue, do not use it as part of your 100 words. Count how many sentences are in the first 100 words. Note: Unless your first 100 words ends exactly on a period, the number should use a decimal point (i.e. 4.1, 8.5, 9.75). Count how many syllables are in the first 100 words. There should be more than 100. Plot the two numbers on the graph below and determine the grade level of your piece. 2. 3. 4. Short Words 108 112 Long Words 116 120 124 128 132 136 140 144 148 152 156 160 164 168 172 Short Sentences 23.0 20.0 14.7 14.3 12.5 1 11.1 10.0 2 9.2 8.3 3 7.5 7.1 6.7 4 5 6.3 5.8 5.5 5.3 6 5.0 Long Sentences 4.8 4.5 4.3 7 8 4.2 4.0 9 10 11 12 College 3.8 3.7 3.6 To further verify the level, randomly select three 100-word passages from your piece. Plot the average number of syllables and the average number of sentences per 100 words on the graph to determine the grade level of the material. Few passages should fall in the gray area. Source: Edward Fry, Burgess University Reading Center, New Brunswick, NJ 37 176 RATIOCINATION: A PROCESS FOR REVISION Step One: Highlight (or underline) the first sentence of the composition in one color. Highlight (or underline) the second sentence of the composition in a second color. Continue alternating colors throughout the paper. Step Two: Look at each individual sentence and make sure it is a complete thought and not a run-on or fragment. Correcting Run-on Sentences What are the two (or more) complete thoughts in the sentence? Correct your run-on sentences by: a. adding a coordinating (FANBOYS) conjunction and a comma if the two parts of the sentence are complete b. adding a subordinating conjunction to make one complete clause dependent on the other c. adding a semicolon if the two parts of the sentence are complete d. creating two (or more) individual sentences with end punctuation and capital letters Correcting Sentence Fragments Make sure a. the sentence has a complete subject and a complete predicate b. that the thought is complete Step Three: Circle the end punctuation and first word in each sentence in a third color. Check for capitalization. List each circled word in the left margin. Highlight the words that are used too often. Correcting Sentence Beginnings Vary your sentence beginnings by: a. flipping the sentence around by putting the end of the sentence at the beginning Example: Paula excels at math. Math poses no problem for Paula. b. adding a transition word at the beginning of the sentence (see p.29 of the Peak to Peak Writer’s Handbook for examples) c. combining sentences using one of the techniques from Step Two Correcting Run-On Sentences. Step Four: Put a rectangle around each state of being verb (be, am, is, are, was, were, been – a full list of linking verbs may be found in the Linking Verb Song on page 38 of the Peak to Peak Writer’s Handbook). Put sentences into active voice by eliminating your linking verbs. Eliminate Linking Verbs Minimize linking verbs by a. flipping the sentence around by putting the end of the sentence at the beginning Example: Brian is intelligent. Intelligence exudes from Brian. b. choosing an active verb Example: Brian is intelligent. Brian displays intellectual capacity both verbally and in writing. 38 Step Five: Choose eight sentences (from the middle of your piece of writing) on which to score your vocabulary level. Avoid using introductory and concluding paragraphs for this step if possible. Put an asterisk above each word that fits the following criteria: Do count: a. words with three or more syllables b. higher level one and two syllable words (ex: crux, profound) – these are words you would not use in every day conversation c. mature phrasing (including figurative language) Do not count: a. simple two’s + -ing or –ed b. any word used more than twice c. a word used incorrectly d. proper nouns Convert your word count to a grade level: 0-5 = basic 5-10 = functional 10-15 = proficient 15-20 = academic 20+ = technical/advanced 3rd – 5th grade 5th grade 8th grade HS professional/college level Correct Vocabulary Deficits Use a thesaurus to improve your word choice. Have peers make word choice suggestions. Step Six: Circle all apostrophes and make sure they are used correctly. Checking for Correct Apostrophes Apostrophes may be used a. in contractions to represent missing letters Example: it’s (for it is), you’re (for you are) b. to show possession Example: boy’s coat (the coat belonging to the boy) girls’ soccer team (the team belonging to the girls) Step Seven: Underline all of the pronouns in your writing. Draw a line between the pronoun and the noun to which it refers (its antecedent). Make sure that the two agree in number. Example: The crowd cheered for its team. Step Eight: Read your paper backwards, and highlight the following commonly confused words: your, you’re, there, their, they’re, its, it’s. Next, read the paper normally and check to see that the words are all spelled correctly. 39 The Linking Verb Song (to the tune of Take Me Out to the Ball Game) Be being am is are was Take me out to the ball game. were shall be will be has been Take me out to the have been had been Buy me some peanuts crowd. shall have been and cracker jacks. will have been should be would be can be could be I don’t care if I never come back – Oh it’s should have been would have been could have been root, root, root for the home team. appear become feel grow look If they don’t win, it’s a shame. remain seem smell sound stay taste For it’s you’re out one, two, three strikes –avoid linking verbs! at the old ball game! 40 6+1 Traits of Writing Rubrics 1. Ideas and Content 2. Organization 3. Language/Word Choice (Diction) 4. Voice (Tone) 5. Sentence Fluency (Syntax) 6. Conventions +1. Presentation 41 Ideas and Content 4: Ideas: use level two and level three analysis provide persuasive support for the thesis in body paragraphs avoid imprecision and overstatement use persuasive techniques present specific, relevant textual evidence to support the thesis appropriately document sources are clear and focused are fresh and original are easily readable overall 3: Ideas: contain most of the above elements, with minor oversights overall readability is not affected by oversights 2: Ideas: contain some of the above elements, but are missing a significant piece or pieces overall readability is somewhat affected by oversights 1: Ideas: contain few of the above elements overall readability is significantly affected 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 42 Organization 4: Organization contains: a grabber that draws the reader’s attention a thesis present at the end of the first paragraph ideas that flow logically from one to another smooth transitions that connect ideas and paragraphs topic sentences that support the thesis paragraphs that are focused and support the topic sentences a strong conclusion that sums up and suggests further relevance 3: Organization: contains most of the above requirements, with minor oversights overall readability is not affected by oversights 2: Organization: contains some of the above requirements, but is missing a significant piece or pieces overall readability is somewhat affected by oversights 1: Organization: contains few of the above requirements overall readability is significantly affected 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 43 Language/Word Choice (Diction) 4: Language consistently: employs literary techniques (figurative language, allusion, etc.) varies word choice shows rather than tells paints a picture with words describes topics using: precise nouns powerful action verbs descriptive adjectives rich and detailed images 3: Language frequently: employs literary techniques (figurative language, allusion, etc.) varies word choice shows rather than tells paints a picture with words describes topics using: precise nouns powerful action verbs descriptive adjectives rich and detailed images 2: Language occasionally: employs literary techniques (figurative language, allusion, etc.) varies word choice shows rather than tells paints a picture with words describes topics using: precise nouns powerful action verbs descriptive adjectives rich and detailed images 1: Language rarely: employs literary techniques (figurative language, allusion, etc.) varies word choice shows rather than tells paints a picture with words describes topics using: precise nouns powerful action verbs descriptive adjectives rich and detailed images 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 44 Voice (Tone) 4: Writing consistently shows: appropriate tone for the intended audience consistent tone throughout SOAPSTone information clearly articulated personality, individuality vivid expression, emotion ability to evoke strong reader response 3: Writing frequently shows: appropriate tone for the intended audience consistent tone throughout SOAPSTone information articulated personality, individuality vivid expression, emotion ability to evoke reader response 2: Writing occasionally shows: appropriate tone in places consistent tone in places some SOAPSTone information articulated personality, individuality expression, emotion ability to evoke some reader response 1: Writing rarely shows: appropriate tone consistent tone SOAPSTone information articulated personality, individuality expression, emotion ability to evoke any reader response 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 45 Sentence Fluency (Syntax) 4: Writing consistently flows smoothly due to: a variety of sentence lengths, structure and beginnings appropriate and sophisticated transition words 3: Writing frequently flows smoothly due to: a variety of sentence lengths, structure and beginnings appropriate and sophisticated transition words 2: Writing occasionally flows smoothly due to: a variety of sentence lengths, structure and beginnings appropriate and sophisticated transition words 1: Writing rarely flows smoothly due to lack of: a variety of sentence lengths, structure and beginnings appropriate and sophisticated transition words 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 46 Conventions 4: Writing shows consistent mastery of: capitalization punctuation spelling grammar indentation complete sentences Readability and meaning are enhanced. 3: Writing contains minor errors in: capitalization punctuation spelling grammar indentation complete sentences Errors do not interfere with readability and meaning. 2: Writing contains errors in: capitalization spelling indentation punctuation grammar complete sentences Errors interfere with readability, but not meaning. 1: Writing contains numerous errors in all mechanics and grammar. Text is unreadable due to errors that interfere with readability and meaning. 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 47 Presentation 4: Final draft contains: identifying information is in the upper, right-hand corner title centered on top line without quotes or underlining margins are 1-inch on both sides paragraphs are indented 1/2 inch standard, appropriate 12-inch font, if typed double spaced, if typed legible cursive, if handwritten blue or black ink, if handwritten writing or typing only on one side of the paper page numbers in the bottom, right-hand corner all pages stapled together in the upper, left-hand corner pages in the correct order overall presentation that enhances readability 3: Final draft: contains most of the above requirements, with minor oversights overall readability is not affected by oversights 2: Final draft: contains some of the above requirements, but is missing a significant piece or pieces overall readability is somewhat affected by oversights 1: Final draft: contains few of the above requirements overall readability is significantly affected 4=advanced 3=proficient 2=partially proficient 1=unsatisfactory 48 CITING SOURCES: KEY POINTS 1. Why cite your sources? Because you must give credit to others for their ideas and work. Failing to do so can have very severe consequences, up to and including expulsion. 2. Punctuation is VERY important! 3. Cite ALL pertinent information – if you are unsure, it is better to have too much than too little. 4. Follow the citation format EXACTLY! Double-space and reverse-indent all entries (see “Notes” at the end of this document). MLA Citation Style MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers, 7th edition Book Okuda, Michael, and Denise Okuda. Star Trek Chronology: The History of the Future. New York: Pocket, 1993. Print. Journal Article Wilcox, Rhonda V. "Shifting Roles and Synthetic Women in Star Trek: The Next Generation." Studies in Popular Culture 13.2 (1991): 53-65. Print. Newspaper or Magazine Article Di Rado, Alicia. "Trekking through College: Classes Explore Modern Society Using the World of Star Trek." Los Angeles Times 15 Mar. 1995: A3. Print. Book Article or Chapter James, Nancy E. "Two Sides of Paradise: The Eden Myth According to Kirk and Spock." Spectrum of the Fantastic. Ed. Donald Palumbo. Westport: Greenwood, 1988. 219-223. Print. Encyclopedia Article (well known reference books) Sturgeon, Theodore. "Science Fiction." The Encyclopedia Americana. International ed. 1995. Print. Encyclopedia Article (less familiar reference books) Horn, Maurice. "Flash Gordon." The World Encyclopedia of Comics. Ed. Maurice Horn. 2 vols. New York: Chelsea, 1976. Print. ERIC Document Fuss-Reineck, Marilyn. “Sibling Communication in Star Trek: The Next Generation: Conflicts between Brothers.” Miami: Speech Communication Assn., 1993. ERIC Document Reproduction Service ED364932. Print. Gale Reference Book (and other books featuring reprinted articles) Shayon, Robert Lewis. "The Interplanetary Spock." Saturday Review 17 June 1967: 46. Rpt. in Contemporary Literary Criticism. Ed. Sharon R. Gunton. Vol. 17. Detroit: Gale Research, 1981. 403. Print. 49 Textbook Farah, Karls, and the National Geographic Society. World History: The Human Experience. Columbus, Ohio:The McGraw-Hill Companies, Inc. , 2001. Print. MLA Works Cited: Electronic Sources (Web Publications) from the Purdue Online Writing Lab Summary: MLA (Modern Language Association) style is most commonly used to write papers and cite sources within the liberal arts and humanities. This resource, updated to reflect the MLA Handbook for Writers of Research Papers (7th ed.) and the MLA Style Manual and Guide to Scholarly Publishing (3rd ed.), offers examples for the general format of MLA research papers, in-text citations, endnotes/footnotes, and the Works Cited page. Please use the example at the bottom of this page to cite the Purdue OWL in MLA. Contributors:Tony Russell, Allen Brizee Last Edited: 2010-05-05 02:05:01 MLA lists electronic sources as Web Publications. Thus, when including the medium of publication for electronic sources, list the medium as Web. It is always a good idea to maintain personal copies of electronic information, when possible. It is good practice to print or save Web pages or, better, using a program like Adobe Acrobat, to keep your own copies for future reference. Most Web browsers will include URL/electronic address information when you print, which makes later reference easy. Also, you might use the Bookmark function in your Web browser in order to return to documents more easily. Important Note on the Use of URLs in MLA MLA no longer requires the use of URLs in MLA citations. Because Web addresses are not static (i.e. they change often) and because documents sometimes appear in multiple places on the Web (e.g. on multiple databases), MLA explains that most readers can find electronic sources via title or author searches in Internet Search Engines. For instructors or editors that still wish to require the use of URLs, MLA suggests that the URL appear in angle brackets after the date of access. Break URLs only after slashes. Aristotle. Poetics. Trans. S. H. Butcher. The Internet Classics Archive. Web Atomic and Massachusetts Institute of Technology, 13 Sept. 2007. Web. 4 Nov. 2008. ‹http://classics.mit.edu/›. 50 Abbreviations Commonly Used with Electronic Sources If publishing information is unavailable for entries that require publication information such as publisher (or sponsor) names and publishing dates, MLA requires the use of special abbreviations to indicate that this information is not available. Use n.p. to indicate that neither a publisher nor a sponsor name has been provided. Use n.d. when the Web page does not provide a publication date. When an entry requires that you provide a page but no pages are provided in the source (as in the case of an online-only scholarly journal or a work that appears in an online-only anthology), use the abbreviation n. pag. Basic Style for Citations of Electronic Sources (Including Online Databases) Here are some common features you should try and find before citing electronic sources in MLA style. Not every Web page will provide all of the following information. However, collect as much of the following information as possible both for your citations and for your research notes: Author and/or editor names (if available) Article name in quotation marks (if applicable) Title of the Website, project, or book in italics. (Remember that some Print publications have Web publications with slightly different names. They may, for example, include the additional information or otherwise modified information, like domain names [e.g. .com or .net].) Any version numbers available, including revisions, posting dates, volumes, or issue numbers. Publisher information, including the publisher name and publishing date. Take note of any page numbers (if available). Date you accessed the material. URL (if required, or for your own personal reference). Citing an Entire Web Site It is necessary to list your date of access because web postings are often updated, and information available on one date may no longer be available later. Be sure to include the complete address for the site. Remember to use n.p. if no publisher name is available and n.d. if no publishing date is given. Editor, author, or compiler name (if available). Name of Site. Version number. Name of institution/organization affiliated with the site (sponsor or publisher), date of resource creation (if available). Medium of publication. Date of access. 51 The Purdue OWL Family of Sites. The Writing Lab and OWL at Purdue and Purdue U, 2008. Web. 23 Apr. 2008. Felluga, Dino. Guide to Literary and Critical Theory. Purdue U, 28 Nov. 2003. Web. 10 May 2006. Course or Department Websites Give the instructor name. Then list the title of the course (or the school catalog designation for the course) in italics. Give appropriate department and school names as well, following the course title. Remember to use n.d. if not publishing date is given. Felluga, Dino. Survey of the Literature of England. Purdue U, Aug. 2006. Web. 31 May 2007. English Department. Purdue U, 14 May 2009. Web. 20 Apr. 2009. A Page on a Web Site For an individual page on a Web site, list the author or alias if known, followed by the information covered above for entire Web sites. Remember to use n.p. if no publisher name is available and n.d. if no publishing date is given. "How to Make Vegetarian Chili." eHow.com. eHow, n.d. Web. 24 Feb. 2009. An Image (Including a Painting, Sculpture, or Photograph) Provide the artist's name, the work of art italicized, the date of creation, the institution and city where the work is housed. Follow this initial entry with the name of the Website in italics, the medium of publication, and the date of access. Goya, Francisco. The Family of Charles IV. 1800. Museo Nacional del Prado, Madrid. Museo National del Prado. Web. 22 May 2006. Klee, Paul. Twittering Machine. 1922. Museum of Modern Art, New York. The Artchive. Web. 22 May 2006. If the work is cited on the web only, then provide the name of the artist, the title of the work, the medium of the work, and then follow the citation format for a website. If the work is posted via a username, use that username for the author. brandychloe. "Great Horned Owl Family." Photograph. Webshots. American Greetings, 22 May 2006. Web. 5 Nov. 2009. 52 Below are several examples that are formatted properly in the following order (painting; map; personal photo; copyrighted graphic): di Bondone, Giotto. The Morning of Christ. Painting/Fresco. 1305. WebMuseum, Paris. 1 June 1999. Web. 5 May 2010. “Methuen, Massachusetts.” Map. U.S. Gazeteer. US Census Bureau. 4 Oct. 1999. Web. 5 May 2010. Peak to Peak Dodge Ball Game. Personal Photograph Taken by Author. 2009. “X-Box 360 Logo.” Online Graphic Image. About: Xbox Games. 2007. Microsoft Corporation. 17 Apr. 2007. Web. 5 May 2010. If you are citing an image on a website IN ADDITION to the website as a whole, you can cite the website as a whole, and then cite the image in-text. An Article in a Web Magazine Provide the author name, article name in quotation marks, title of the Web magazine in italics, publisher name, publication date, medium of publication, and the date of access. Remember to use n.p. if no publisher name is available and n.d. if not publishing date is given. Bernstein, Mark. "10 Tips on Writing the Living Web." A List Apart: For People Who Make Websites. A List Apart Mag., 16 Aug. 2002. Web. 4 May 2009. An Article in an Online Scholarly Journal For all online scholarly journals, provide the author(s) name(s), the name of the article in quotation marks, the title of the publication in italics, all volume and issue numbers, and the year of publication. Article in an Online-only Scholarly Journal MLA requires a page range for articles that appear in Scholarly Journals. If the journal you are citing appears exclusively in an online format (i.e. there is no corresponding print publication) that does not make use of page numbers, use the abbreviation n. pag. to denote that there is no pagination for the publication. Dolby, Nadine. “Research in Youth Culture and Policy: Current Conditions and Future Directions.” Social Work and Society: The International Online-Only Journal 6.2 (2008): n. pag. Web. 20 May 2009. 53 Article in an Online Scholarly Journal That Also Appears in Print Cite articles in online scholarly journals that also appear in print as you would a scholarly journal in print, including the page range of the article. Provide the medium of publication that you used (in this case, Web) and the date of access. Wheelis, Mark. "Investigating Disease Outbreaks Under a Protocol to the Biological and Toxin Weapons Convention." Emerging Infectious Diseases 6.6 (2000): 595-600. Web. 8 Feb. 2009. An Article from an Online Database (or Other Electronic Subscription Service) Cite articles from online databases (e.g. LexisNexis, ProQuest, JSTOR, ScienceDirect) and other subscription services just as you would print sources. Since these articles usually come from periodicals, be sure to consult the appropriate sections of the Works Cited: Periodicals page, which you can access via its link at the bottom of this page. In addition to this information, provide the title of the database italicized, the medium of publication, and the date of access. Note: Previous editions of the MLA Style Manual required information about the subscribing institution (name and location). This information is no longer required by MLA. Junge, Wolfgang, and Nathan Nelson. “Nature's Rotary Electromotors.” Science 29 Apr. 2005: 642-44. Science Online. Web. 5 Mar. 2009. Langhamer, Claire. “Love and Courtship in Mid-Twentieth-Century England.” Historical Journal 50.1 (2007): 173-96. ProQuest. Web. 27 May 2009. E-mail (including E-mail Interviews) Give the author of the message, followed by the subject line in quotation marks. State to whom to message was sent, the date the message was sent, and the medium of publication. Kunka, Andrew. "Re: Modernist Literature." Message to the author. 15 Nov. 2000. Email. Neyhart, David. "Re: Online Tutoring." Message to Joe Barbato. 1 Dec. 2000. E-mail. A Listserv, Discussion Group, or Blog Posting Cite Web postings as you would a standard Web entry. Provide the author of the work, the title of the posting in quotation marks, the Web site name in italics, the publisher, and the posting date. Follow with the medium of publication and the date of access. Include screen names as author names when author name is not known. If both names are known, place the author’s name in brackets. Remember if the publisher of the site is unknown, use the abbreviation n.p. Editor, screen name, author, or compiler name (if available). “Posting Title.” Name of Site. Version number (if available). Name of institution/organization affiliated with the site (sponsor or publisher). Medium of publication. Date of access. 54 Salmar1515 [Sal Hernandez]. “Re: Best Strategy: Fenced Pastures vs. Max Number of Rooms?” BoardGameGeek. BoardGameGeek, 29 Sept. 2008. Web. 5 Apr. 2009. Notes: Arrange the items on your reference list alphabetically by author (or first word), interfiling books, articles, etc. If you have more than one author, use the following format: 2 or 3 authors: Diehl, Daniel, and Mark Donelly. Medieval Furniture: Plans and Instructions for Historical Reproductions. Mechanicsburg, PA: Stackpole, 1999. Print. More than 3 authors: Roberts, Simon, et. Al. The Complete Java 2 Certification Study Guide. Alameda, CA: Sybex, 1999. Print. If no author is given, start with the title. Double space all lines. Indent the second and following lines 5 spaces (or one tab = one half inch). Abbreviate the names of all months except May, June, and July. If the paging of a magazine or newspaper article is continued elsewhere in the issue, include only the first page followed by a plus sign (ex. 25+.). If the encyclopedia does not arrange its articles alphabetically, treat the encyclopedia article as if it were a book article. Specific volume and page numbers are cited in the text, not in the list of references. Gale Reference Book: cite the original source being reprinted as shown under Book, Journal Article, Newspaper or Magazine Article, etc. The example shows a Magazine Article. Then include the citation information for the reference book. The rules concerning a title within a title are not displayed here for purposes of clarity. See the printed version of the MLA Handbook (7th edition) for details. For documents and situations not listed here, see the printed 7th edition of the MLA Handbook. 55 See Works Cited Page example below: WORKS CITED Lynch, Tim. “DSN Trials and Tribble-ations” Review. Psi Phi: Bradley's Science Fiction Club. Bradley University. 1996. Web. 8 Oct. 1997. Okuda, Michael, and Denise Okuda. Star Trek Chronology: The History of the Future. New York: Pocket, 1993. Print. Shayon, Robert Lewis. "The Interplanetary Spock." Saturday Review 17 June 1967: 46. Contemporary Literary Criticism. Web. 16 Oct. 2001. Sturgeon, Theodore. "Science Fiction." The Encyclopedia Americana. International ed., 1995. Print. *See “Notes” section above for a description of how to cite a source with multiple authors. 56 PARENTHETICAL CITATIONS What is a parenthetical citation? A parenthetical citation, which is also known as an in-text citation, is a way to signal to your reader that you are either directly quoting from, or paraphrasing, the words and ideas of another writer. It also tells your reader where to look if s/he wants to see the quote in context. You must provide a parenthetical citation every time you use textual evidence in the body of a paper. What should a parenthetical citation include? In its most basic format, it should include: 1. the last name of the author you are quoting or paraphrasing 2. the page number on which you found the quotation Sometimes, you might be using a source that requires more specific instructions, such as: an article with no known author; a poem; multiple books by the same author. In cases such as these, please see “Where can I look for more specific information?” below. Remember: any source cited in the body of your paper must also appear in the “works cited” part of your paper, as well. How should I format a parenthetical citation? This depends on the type of source you are using. The basic form for a short quotation (4 typed lines or fewer) from a print source is as follows: 1. The parenthetical citation occurs after the ending quotation mark. 2. No punctuation should be used within the parentheses. 3. The parenthetical citation must be placed inside the end punctuation for the quotation. 4. The citation should be placed so that it does not disrupt the natural flow of the sentence – usually right before the ending punctuation for your sentence. Examples – original quotation: My application was at first fluctuating and uncertain; it gained strength as I proceeded, and soon became so ardent and eager that the stars often disappeared in the light of morning whilst I was yet engaged in my laboratory. – Mary Shelley, Frankenstein, page 22 parenthetical citation: As Victor Frankenstein became more engrossed in his experiment, he paid so little attention to time that “the stars often disappeared in the light of morning” as he worked on his creature (Shelley 22). another version: Victor worked so laboriously on the creature that he had little knowledge of the passage of time: “the stars often disappeared in the light of morning whilst I was yet engaged in my laboratory” (Shelley 22). paraphrased version: Days and nights flew by as Victor worked; his passion for his experiment grew so steadily that he had no knowledge of the passage of time (Shelley 22). 57 What about websites? Follow the same guidelines as above. However, page numbers are not relevant due to website formatting. Instead, determine in which paragraph your quotation is found. For example, if your quoted material is in the fourth paragraph of the webpage, your citation would be as follows: (Fontana para. 4). How can I make the quotation naturally fit into my paper? It is important to integrate textual evidence into your own words. If you don’t do this properly, you commit the error of a dropped quotation, or a quote that is “dropped” into the middle of your paragraph with no anchor. Instead, announce to your reader that you will be quoting from a source by using a signal phrase. dropped quotation example: Victor Frankenstein became more and more engrossed in his studies. “The stars often disappeared in the light of morning whilst I was yet engaged in my laboratory” (Shelley 22). fixed with the use of a signal phrase: Victor Frankenstein became more and more engrossed in his studies, admitting that “the stars often disappeared in the light of morning whilst I was yet engaged in my laboratory” (Shelley 22). sample signal phrases you can use: admits agrees believes claims confirms declares insists observes proves responds states thinks Where can I look for more specific information? Most of the time, the examples above will be all you need. However, there may be some instances in which you need more help – if you are quoting more than 4 lines of text, for instance. When in doubt, check with your teacher to be certain you are citing correctly. 58 Citation Pages Works Cited Hacker, Diana. A Pocket Style Manual with 2009 MLA Update. 2nd ed. Boston: Bedford Books, 2009. Print. Purdue OWL. "MLA Formatting and Style Guide." The Purdue OWL. Purdue U Writing Lab, 10 May 2008. Web. 15 Nov. 2008. Sebranek, Patrick, Dave Kemper, and Verne Meyer. Writers Inc. Wilmington, MA: Write Source, 2006. Print. Shelley, Mary Wollstonecraft. Frankenstein. Philadelphia: Chelsea House Printers, 2007. Print. The Purdue OWL. Purdue U Writing Lab, 2008. Web. 27 Dec. 2008. Resources: Writer’s Inc. 2006 edition (the LMC has multiple copies) Citing Sources page on the LMC website Electronic Sources MLA Style: Purdue Online Writing Lab. http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/08/ 59 Writer’s Handbook Bibliography and Resources for Further Information Choi, Stephanie, and others. Central Style: A Guide for Research. Greeley: Greeley Central High School, 1999. The College Entrance Examination Board. The AP Vertical Teams Guide to English, 2nd Ed. Princeton: The College Entrance Examination Board, 2002. Heffernan, James A. and John E. Lincoln. Writing: A Concise Handbook. New York: W.W. Norton and Company, 1997. Fontana, Anthony, and Cary J. Smith. A Writer’s Notebook. Greeley: Heath Junior High School, 2000. Hacker, Diane. A Writer’s Reference. 3rd Ed. New York: Bedford books, 1995. Sebranek, Patrick, Dave Kemper, and Verne Meyer. Writers Inc. Wilmington, MA: Houghton Mifflin, 2001. 60