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AO6 Advanced Therapy Set 2
Vocabulary
Ofte , just usi g high le el ords is t e ough to rea h the highest arks. You need to
grasp the nuances of language: words may be synonyms and mean broadly the same thing,
but changing the words has an impact on the overall essence of the sentence.
Read the following sentences. Consider the effect that the different adjective choice has each
time and write a brief explanation of why the language choice has that effect.
Example Sentence
Nuanced Meaning/Effect
Without a doubt, she was
an obese woman.
Without a doubt, she was
a plump woman.
Without a doubt, she was
a colossal woman.
Without a doubt, she was
a sizeable woman.
Without a doubt, she was
a voluminous woman.
The position of a single or double adjective can have significant impact on its effect. Usually,
moving the adjective to the front or the end of a sentence makes the emphasis to fall on
that adjective. Therefore, if you want to really emphasise an adjective, placing them at the
front or end of a sentence is very effective. You always need a comma (or a dash if you want
even more emphasis) when you do this.
In the following sentences, move the adjective to either the front or the end of the clause.
The first one has been done for you.
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Original Sentence
Sentence ith Fronted or Ended Adjecti e s
The melancholic man longed for his past. Melancholic, the man longed for his past.
In her anguish and grief, the broken
woman wept.
Pulling his owner along, the effervescent
puppy ran.
The pernicious, noxious smoke crept
along the floor.
Synonymous adverbs can often have slightly different implications. Therefore, writers must
carefully consider which adverbs they use in their writing.
Look at the sentences below. For each one, consider which of the adverbs listed below would
be most effective in the space and why. Write a short justification for your answer.
The woman carefully / tenderly / gently tended his wounds. (Love)
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The two players squared up to each other aggressively / belligerently /
antagonistically. (Arrogance)
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Quietly / inaudibly /noiselessly, the girl crept away from her drunken grandfather.
(Discomfort / worry)
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Surprisingly / miraculously / astoundingly, he was actually going on a date. (Humour)
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Adverbials do the same job as adverbs in the fact that they add to or modify a verb but
adverbials are often phrases. Essentially, an adverbial is a word or phrase that gives the
reader information about the time, place or manner in which something is done.
Prepositio al phrases are also ad er ials. E.g. after dark, u der the la ket…
Underline the adverbials in the following sentences.
In hat and scarf and gloves and coat, she ventured outside, apprehensive that she
might encounter an ice-monster or some other creature of doom.
On the bed, each and every day, the teddy bear waited for the door to close, waiting
to come alive.
More and more often, people simply accept what is told to them on the news by
politicians through their well-rehearsed and well edited speeches.
Verbs can be used to create a particular atmosphere or tone. For each of the sentences
below, identify the tone or atmosphere that is created by the verb.
The soldiers decimated the village.
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The toddler waddled in his nappy.
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Gerald gobbled down his lunch.
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She caressed his cheek.
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In each of the sentences below, replace the verbs with alternatives that will create the
atmosphere or tone in brackets.
The man stopped and spoke. (tension)
The minions walked along the street, laughing and playing. (fun and silliness)
She sat down, looking at the wall and crying. (grief)
She stepped on to the stage, holding on to her speech. (nerves)
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For each of the following participles, find a synonym that has a similar but more extreme
meaning. The first one has been done for you.
Laughing: hooting
Damaged:
Scared:
Shouting:
Working:
Eating:
Annoyed:
You can use a double participle at the start of a sentence to show a developing emotion or
atmosphere. For each of the double participles above, write a sentence that begins with
the as a pair. The first one has een done for you. Don’t forget that you’ll need a co
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after both participles.
Laughing, hooting, I spat my drink out, spraying almost everyone at the table,
including the joke-teller, with mouth-warm beer.
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Imagery
A writer can create imagery by using figurative language. The figurative language helps to
create the image and to give it a sense of depth and emotion. When trying to use figurative
language in your writing, try to avoid cliché (e.g. as fast as a cheetah). It is important that
the figurative la guage sele ted really refle ts the i age a d to e you re tryi g to reate.
Look at the examples of figurative language below. Circle the example that you think is the
most effective at creating the tone in brackets and write an explanation of why.
Sentence start
His leg s apped…
Simile
like a twig
Personification
the bones screaming out
Metaphor
a broken dream
violent image
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He aressed her…
Simile
as if she were his
Personification
his hand longing for her warmth
Metaphor
his trophy,
his reward
discomfort
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Complete the chart below with effective figurative language. Base your ideas on World War
One. The other column can be filled with any other ingredients you want to add, such as
adverbials or participle phrases. The first one has been done for you.
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Simile
Personification
The bullet
ripped through
his gut.
like that
familiar flip of
fear, or shock
or love.
an enemy,
death himself,
determined to kill. fired from a gun
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Metaphor
Other
tearing his
insides out
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AO6 Advanced Testing Set 2
Task One:
Write three of your o n sentences ith fronted or ended’ adjecti es or paired adjecti es.
Consider the nuanced meaning / effect of your choice of vocabulary as you write.
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Task Two:
Add adverbs and / or adverbials to the following sentences to create the effect in brackets.
She sat down. (Grief)
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The train came to a stop. (Suspense)
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He survived. (Humour)
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Task Three:
Write a description of scientists’ testing animals. You can choose whether to make your verb
choices show their actions as negative and cruel or positive and caring.
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Task Four:
You can build atmosphere in a sentence by using a series of participle phrases to create a
sense of many things occurring or being true at once. Write three separate sentences,
designed to create the atmosphere in the following bullet points. The first one has been done
for you.
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Busy excitement
Stamping their feet on the wooden stalls, clapping their hands, cheering and singing
their celebratory songs, the Manchester United fans filled Old Trafford up with a
cacophony of victory calls.
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Sinister atmosphere
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A complicated and damaged person
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The feeling of being lost
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Task Five:
Use the planning table at the end of Advanced Therapy as inspiration to describe a scene
from World War One.
Success Criteria:
 A range of figurative language
 Participle phrases
 Prepositional phrases
 Adverbials
 Effective vocabulary
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Commissioned by The PiXL Club Ltd.
This resource is strictly for the use of member schools for as long as they remain members of The PiXL Club. It may not be copied, sold, nor
transferred to a third party or used by the school after membership ceases. Until such time it may be freely used within the member
school. All opinions and contributions are those of the authors. The contents of this resource are not connected with, nor endorsed by,
any other company, organisation or institution. PiXL Club Ltd endeavour to trace and contact copyright owners. If there are any
inadvertent omissions or errors in the acknowledgements or usage, this is unintended and PiXL will remedy these on written notification.
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