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Sample Thesis - Bad
There were many responses to the spread of
Buddhism in China. Some responses were
positive towards Buddhism, some responses
were neutral, and others were negative.
Sample Thesis - Better
There were a variety of responses to the spread
of Buddhism in China after the fall of the Han
Dynasty. Some Chinese converted to Buddhism
because it promised an end to sorrow. Some
Chinese attempted to reconcile Buddhism and
existing Chinese beliefs. Yet, some elite Chinese
believed it was destroying Chinese culture. Their
responses varied according to their position and
time period the document was recorded.
Sample Thesis - Best
Chinese responses to the spread of Buddhism
seemed to depend upon the time period the
document was recorded. Early supporters, living in
an era of political disunity, believed Buddhism could
help end sorrow. As the imperial system was
reestablished two additional responses emerged.
Some scholars attempt to reconcile the increasing
popular Buddhism with existing Chinese beliefs,
while officials in government began to attack
Buddhism as a threat to Chinese culture.
Body Paragraph - Worst
Zhi Dun said whoever follows the teaching of
Buddha will achieve nirvana at the end of their
life (2). Zhi Dun said this because he was living in
era of disunity.
Body Paragraph - Bad
Some people supported Buddhism. Zhi Dun
said whoever follows the teaching of Buddha
will achieve nirvana at the end of their life (2).
Zhi Dun said this because he was living in era of
disunity.
Body Paragraph - Better
Some Chinese believed Buddhism could help put
an end to sorrow. China was experiencing a lot
of sorrow due to nomadic invasions, so the idea
of an afterlife free of sorrow would be
appealing. It was during this era that the most
positive responses to Buddhism emerged. For
example, Zhi Dun said whoever follows the
teaching of Buddha will achieve nirvana at the
end of their life (2).
Body Paragraph - Best
Early Chinese, writing during an era of disunity,
believed Buddhism could help put an end to sorrow.
People tend to turn towards religions of salvation
during a period of disunity and the Chinese were no
exception. Early Chinese responses were positive,
because Buddhism provided the Chinese with a
sorrow free afterlife which was an idea
Confucianism was lacking. According to Zhi Dun,
Buddhism was worth supporting because following
the teachings of the Buddha meant an afterlife of
spiritual bliss (2).