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Revising
1. Descriptive Language
2. Conciseness
3. Adding and Deleting Information
Assignment
• 1. Fold a sheet of paper in half like a hamburger.
• 2. Write one paragraph describing your bedroom (or
someone’s you know) at its messiest.
• 3. Make a list of 10 things you touch, taste, see, hear, or
feel in this bedroom.
• 4. Using the bottom half of your paper, rewrite your
original paragraph to include these items.
Descriptive Language
• A writer’s choice of words can make the
difference between boring and interesting.
To make writing more effective, writers
often use descriptive language.
– descriptive language includes:
• sensory details – words that appeal to the senses
• colorful modifiers – adjectives and adverbs that
give vivid details
• action words – verbs that show specific, vivid
action
Practice
• 1. Fold a sheet of paper lengthwise (like a hotdog).
• 2. On the left side of the paper, write a list of 10 random
nouns.
• 3. Turn the paper over and write a list of 10 verbs
specific to an occupation or job (ex. chef)
• 4. Unfold the paper and match the nouns on the left to
the verbs on the right (the nouns should NOT normally
go with the verb).
• 5. Write 10 sentences, using each noun-verb
combination in a sentence.